whether teen should make their own decision
Whether teen should make their own decisions?I think we can talk about this question from two ways. On the one hand ,Although teen are young ,they have to make many important choices by themselves .such like making fiends ,wearing what kinds of clothes…… ,Teen should learn to plan things for themselves ,they need some skills to make a living in the future.many parents care about their children too much. This gives their children a lot of pressure .that is not good for teen. One the other hand ,although teen can make their decisions by them selves,but as for some serous things ,teen should also accept advice from their parents .because parents have more experience and they can tell you what is right and wrong.
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